jueves, 10 de diciembre de 2009

FINAL DRAFT CREATIVE ESSAY

Outline
INTRODUCTION
T.S. I`m with you song makes me think that I`m not the only one who feels alone.
BODY PARAGRAPHS
PARAGRAPH 1
a) Waiting for someone
b) Feeling alone
PARAGRAPH 2
a) Looking for someone
b) Becoming into a ghost
PARAGRAPH 3
a) Trying to find me
b) I wish you can take me out
CONCLUSION
Sometimes we feel alone when we face problems. When i`m facing problems I like to listen to the song:”I`m with you”.


Loneliness

Have you ever felt that sensation of being alone and you wish to stay with someone no matter with whom? Sometimes, I feel that and when I`m feeling it, I like to listen to the song “I`m with you” of Avril Lanvinge. Because that song makes me think that I `m not the only one who feels alone when things go wrong.

I`m standing at the bridge I`m waiting for someone that takes me out from my darkness that is silence as the dead. Where I go crazy because there is no light that illuminates my mind and my heart that is the place where you breathe when I`m imagine on you. Feeling me alone, I`m downhearted because you are far away from home and it is difficult to reach you on the sky.

When I feel alone is like if I were a little child that does not have its blanked that gives support on the most darkness nights. And I start looking for a face like an angel that protect me from the things that I do not want to see, but it cannot protect me from the things that my heart does not want to feel. Suddenly, I become as white as ghost and little by little I fade away as a rainbow.


If you try to find me in the dark, you will not be afraid of entering in my out of space world. It is a mess when I`m alone and nothing is right. But I want you save me from my shadows because a friend in need is a friend indeed. But if you are not there to find me, I will try to forget you because actions speak louder than words. The fact is that I wish you can take me out and save me. I wish you carry me to a place where nobody knows about us because I will know you and I will find that you are pure as snow.


“We're all lonely for something we don't know we're lonely for. How else to explain the curious feeling that goes around feeling like missing somebody we've never even met?”(Foster,W.D.) We sometimes feel alone when we face some problems such as familiar problems or when the person that you love is not with you. In my particular case, the way that I face those problems is by listening this song “I`m with you” because it calms me down, and I start to think in the moments that I wish to be with somebody that can stay with me.



LYRIC

I'm With You lyrics AVRIL LAVINGE

I'm standin' on the bridgeI'm waitin' in the darkI thought that you'd be here by nowThere's nothing but the rainNo footsteps on the groundI'm listening but there's no soundIsn't anyone tryin' to find me?Won't somebody come take me home?It's a damn cold nightI'm tryin' to figure out this lifeWon't you take me by the hand?Take me somewhere newI don't know who you areBut I'm, I'm with youI'm with youHmm hmm hmmI'm looking for a placeI'm searching for a faceIs anybody here I know?'Cause nothing's going rightAnd everything's a messAnd no one likes to be aloneIsn't anyone tryin' to find me?Won't somebody come take me home?It's a damn cold nightI try to figure out this lifeWon't you take me by the hand?Take me somewhere newI don't know who you areBut I'm, I'm with youI'm with youYea yeaOh, why is everything so confusing?Maybe I'm just out of my mindYea eee yeah, yea eee yeahYea yee yea, yea eee yeah,yeahIt's a damn cold nightTryin' to figure out this lifeWon't you take me by the hand?Take me somewhere newI don't know who you areBut I'm, I'm with you, yeaI'm with you, yeaTake me by the handTake me somewhere newI don't know who you areBut I'm, I'm with you, yeaI'm with you, yeaTake me by the handTake me somewhere newI don't know who you areBut I'm, I'm with you, ohI'm with youI'm with you

2 comentarios:

  1. HI ANDRE: I consider that your essay is good and original, it is another way for expressing feelings and your creativity. I love the song that you chose. I like the way, how you took some phrases of the song in your essay, in order to create another idea.
    Good job girl¡¡¡

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  2. Heyy Andre, sorry for posting on your essay soo late!!

    Well I wanna tell you that when I read it I experienced sadness because your essay reminds me how I felt in a particular moment of my life. Whatever I like it so much, you set up your ideas in a clear way!!

    Congrats!

    Bye !!

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