lunes, 2 de noviembre de 2009

TATTOOING (ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAY IN CON)

OUTLINE

TESIS STATEMENT
Tattoos are bad for humans.

BODY PARAGRAPHS:

PARAGRAPH 1:
Problems at the job.

PARAGRAPH 2:
Problems in your health

PARAGRAPH 3:
Problems to donate blood.

CONCLUSION:
Tattoo is not a sin. Tattoo is something that you will have for the rest of your life.

Con Pro
Job troubles
Respect in your job

Diseases
Safe place
Donating
Regulations that permit it.

Pattern 3 Essay

TATTOOING

Have you ever thought on get a tattoo? Probably yes, right because may be your favorite actress or player has one. Nowadays is been common that many people get tattoos. It is because we are having an influence of getting tattoos trough some T.V. programs like “Miami ink” and “Inked”. These programs show us that tattoos are the most amazing experience of get one. But, have those programs shown that tattoos are bad for humans.


First, when you get a tattoo you can have problems in your job because it is something that is not well seen. In some companies and corporations do not permit employers with tattoos because it can give a bad image about their company. So, tattoos can inhibit your ability to get a job. On the other hand; companies and corporations need to respect for diversity that is the key to a successful workplace that they can have their tattoos, but they will need to cover it. So, in that way tattoos should not be a problem in your job.

Second, get a tattoo has some risks that affect in your health. The most common is Blood-borne diseases. It results because if the equipment used to create your tattoo is contaminated with the blood of an infected person, you can contract a number of serious blood-borne diseases. These include hepatitis C, hepatitis B, tetanus, tuberculosis and HIV the virus that causes AIDS. Another risk is skin infections. Tattoos can lead to local bacterial infections. Typical signs and symptoms of an infection include redness, warmth, swelling and a pus-like drainage. Even though, there are people that claims that it is not going to happen if go to the right place to get your tattoo because the process of tattooing is completely sure.

Third, tattoos cannot allow you to donate blood. Donating blood platelets or plasma has always been a noble pursuit to help those in need. Finding suitable donors has become increasingly more difficult because many people have a tattoo and the blood bank doesn't want to risk accepting contaminated blood. Although you can wait a year after a tattoo was applied to donate blood as a precaution it does mean that it is a safe process of donating because you can transmit a disease to the person that needs the blood.

As a conclusion, to get a tattoo or have one is not a sin just you need to be conscious that it can carry out some problems in your health and in your job. Also you have to consider that having a tattoo is something that you will have for the rest of your life. It is not a fashion that you can change when you want it, so it will stay forever.

3 comentarios:

  1. Hello Andrea: I consider that your essay is very good, even you think other thing about tatoos rigth je.To mention the names of TV programs wasw good, because your essay is credible and show investigation about the topic from you.

    Good job girl

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  3. Heyy Andree Monita !!

    Very good essay Andre, Congrats ! I like the way you wrote this essay, it is easy t oread and very understandable. Good selection of pattern.

    I think that in your first paragraph this sentence the idea is not very clear. Maybe is because the Word order: These programs show us that tattoos are the most amazing experience of get one. In the same paragraph the last sentence could be a question, no ?

    In the second paragraph in the sentence previous to the last one, the idea is not very clear.

    In the third paragraph the last word : sure .. must be another word like secure or safe.

    Finally, in the last paragraph in the last sentence, I think you can take out the word : so.

    Well I hope my advices can help you !!!

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